Which Pitch Do You Like Best?
Which of these three pitches for the same manuscript catches your attention and why?
- Just when U.S. WAVE Delacourt thinks she finally has this Nazi spy chase thing under control, Hitler’s wizard adds a minor demon to the mix.
- Skeptical naval commander Drew doesn’t believe in things he can’t touch, but when assigned to lead a psychic team, he’s forced into experiencing unseen planes.
- Wizard Daryl Fergus was flattered when Hitler tapped him to disrupt U.S. war readiness, but he’s stretched to the max by unexpectedly formidable Navy psychics.
Keywords:
Great story.”
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Well let's see
Hi JoAnn,
Well let's see:
1.The problem I find with pitch one is the 'Nazi spy chase thing' what is 'the chase thing'?
2. Pitch 2 & 3 are sort of equal to me although my preference would be 2. It has the least information but is easily understood. If I had to write pitch 2 I'd be more direct.
Naval Commander Drew is a skeptic. He doesn't believe in what he can't touch, yet when assigned to lead a psychic team, he's forced into experiencing unseen planes.
Hope this helps.
Warm Regards
Leslie
easily understood / be more direct
Thanks, Leslie.
I'm starting another look at these pitches. I'm lying in bed with lower back pain. I can sit up at the laptop for only short periods of time, but I have plenty of time to think.
Unfortunately, the first diagnosis of a sprained back was wrong, but yesterday a lab test found an infection. I'm on an antibiotic and the back pain will disappear as I heal.
I'll still have a few days in bed to ponder pitches, though.
Warm regards.